Effect of Tehnology(comment by myaccess)

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What sector of the population will be most seriously affected by a given technology and when? If the technology is one that can be generalized over the entire society, then it will probably have an impact on everyone but if it has localized application, then what form of effect ill exist and for whom? Historically, any example that deals with a technology being localized for some reason would suffice to demonstrate the necessity of studying this issue. In the ancient world, about the time of the rise of the Mesopotamian city states such as Ur and Lagash in the fertile crescent, it was the technological innovation of agriculture that created cities where trade took place. City states arose around the farmlands of the Tigris and Euphrates river valleys, and because of the availability of water transportation (another example of technology), they were able to grow prosperous and powerful. Thus, the citizens of these areas were most greatly affected by the introduction of the agricultural technology, though tribal peoples from along the rivers were involved in the trade that resulted from the sedentary life style the agricultural people practiced. A more contemporary example is the age of "king cotton" in the southern United States. With the cotton gin, cotton manufacture became cheap and profitable. By technologically solving the problem of how to comb the seeds from the cotton fiber rapidly and cheaply, the desirability of cotton as a crop rose dramatically, and there was a thriving market for those goods in England, where the textile industry depended on cotton and wool for its livelihood. The people most directly affected by the technology were those in a position to take advantage of it, that is, the Southern states, where the climate was perfect for growing cotton and where the employment of slave labor was productive enough to be profitable. These conditions did not exist in the North, and, as a result, people living there were relatively untouched by either the cotton industry or the slave labor method of operation, since Northern industry depended on different inputs to create goods and services. Eventually, the schism in social systems represented by the localized nature of the cotton industry technology led to the Civil War and the end of an era. After years of political and economic dominance by an agricultural South, the nation was dominated by a more efficient and more productive North, where, it should be noted, there was a technological advantage in manufacturing industries because of the abundance of raw materials and transportation. Whom a technology affects is as important as how. This can lead to moral questions as well. What of the wonder drugs that could be manufactured or developed but are not because the number of patients requiring them is too small to warrant the costs? What of the ability to save lives through expensive operations such as heart transplants or mechanical hearts? Who receives them and who does not? Who pays for them? Are there too few people affected to warrant continuing that technology? These are some of the questions that arise in considering this aspect of technological development.
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